There is no reason so far to levitate the combat luxuriance.
Bush still ain't got no fans, everyone is in trance.
But, no, oil is more important than our men.
So, fuck them, and let go on the no sense.

Everyone who fights for his country on the opposite site.
Send 'em to Cuba to rot in a prison, right.



to be continued, i can't come up with any serious raps whilst listening to punk

Jake wrote:

I believe in quality, not quantity. I'm usually not a fan of raps that pertain to bragging about themselves like yours, even though most of rap is like that, and i'm usually not a fan of over indulgence in terms of complexity, but I was taken a back with yours. Because for the most part it flows really well, and the tendency with adding a lot of complexity is to mess with the rhythm. That could be good for first as of right now.

Haha jk.

+1 rep
I can't find any inspiration for my rap. I don't want it to be the usually fucked up rap with a stupid assortment of words. Anyone can make that.

Jake wrote:

Haha jk.

What were you kidding about?

jshushij wrote:

Jake wrote:

Haha jk.

What were you kidding about?

I was joking about the sad face. That yours could be better than mine. On page 2. Which it possibly is because mine isn't what you would call a traditional rap, but rather what I call a deep rap.

OH BOY I LIKE THESE THREADS

OH BOY I DON'T LIKE MY OWN RAP

It doesnt even count - 15 line minimum

He said hes still working on it Sher. And hey Bonnie!

jshushij wrote:

Today im raisin’ the standard expectation,
And instillin’ in you a common trepidation.
Im expectin’ to win it all with no frustration,
Cuz I can flow my rhymes with no apprehension.

My beats are my treats that are fully evolved,
They so complex they make your head revolve.
During the termination they’ll be one resolve,
My upcoming triumph will prove what im made of.

I direct my orchestra with an amazin’ complexity,
I leave all of you with a trace of perplexity.
Im known for my flow while you’re a nonentity,
You blend into the crowd while I have a unique identity.

Im known round the town for my colorful vocabulary,
I utilize it in every line, sorta like a constabulary.
You may think you have a chance but it’s to the contrary,
Imma go the whole distance like im a fuckin’ hail mary.

Your raps are dull and they receive tons of criticism,
There aint no competition, youre gonna catch some ableism.
Those other bitches are about to realize their certain amateurism,
Cuz im a consistent show-stealer, im like a human algorithm.

I strive to keep my failures low and my expectations elevated,
My consistency is unsurpassed while you’ve recently abated.
My raps cause inner peace like you’ve been sedated,
After reading my raps all the others look desecrated.

Im now the one to beat, im the top of the class,
My rhythm is superior, it remains unsurpassed.
My lyrics be the smoothest, go compare and contrast,
That’s why imma finish first and you’ll finish last.

Hey, Sausage. Also, to make this post more on topic:

In the three bolded verses you only rhymed the last syllable of relatively long words which ruined the flow completely but other than that it's great, but you should make it more complex. Make references to topics you know about in your raps to diss the opponent. These are the best types of disses because once you understand them you seriously say "OHHHH". That's why in rap battles the crowd hardly ever cheers: they just making noises of recognition because they've understood the reference.

An example of these references would be: "I'll confess to every murder I commited since 3 years old". - Eminem in "If I Get Locked Up Tonight".

He was obviously making a reference to serial killer Ted Bundy who surrounded his aunt in a circle of knives whilst she was sleeping, and when she woke up he was giving her a peculiar smile. He was 3 years old at the time. This wasn't a murder but certainly suggested that something was not right with Bundy. Eminem obviously exaggerated the reference but it was still a clear reference. And once you understand it: MIND BLOWN. (That's not the best example of some of the references he makes though).

Anyway, that's what I'm talking about, you need to make references in your raps to interest the audience instead of coming out with the same old blabber about how you're going to "come first" (LOL). No one gives a shit about that, but if you make references to topics that interest the audience (even if it is coincidentally), you WILL get them on your side. Hope you understand where I'm going with this.

I gotcha. thanks Bonnie. I didnt want to diss them THAT badly though, theyre my friends. Lol. I know im probably being too nice by saying that, but still.

Bonnie wrote:

jshushij wrote:

Today im raisin’ the standard expectation,
And instillin’ in you a common trepidation.
Im expectin’ to win it all with no frustration,
Cuz I can flow my rhymes with no apprehension.

My beats are my treats that are fully evolved,
They so complex they make your head revolve.
During the termination they’ll be one resolve,
My upcoming triumph will prove what im made of.

I direct my orchestra with an amazin’ complexity,
I leave all of you with a trace of perplexity.
Im known for my flow while you’re a nonentity,
You blend into the crowd while I have a unique identity.

Im known round the town for my colorful vocabulary,
I utilize it in every line, sorta like a constabulary.
You may think you have a chance but it’s to the contrary,
Imma go the whole distance like im a fuckin’ hail mary.

Your raps are dull and they receive tons of criticism,
There aint no competition, youre gonna catch some ableism.
Those other bitches are about to realize their certain amateurism,
Cuz im a consistent show-stealer, im like a human algorithm.

I strive to keep my failures low and my expectations elevated,
My consistency is unsurpassed while you’ve recently abated.
My raps cause inner peace like you’ve been sedated,
After reading my raps all the others look desecrated.

Im now the one to beat, im the top of the class,
My rhythm is superior, it remains unsurpassed.
My lyrics be the smoothest, go compare and contrast,
That’s why imma finish first and you’ll finish last.

Hey, Sausage. Also, to make this post more on topic:

In the three bolded verses you only rhymed the last syllable of relatively long words which ruined the flow completely but other than that it's great, but you should make it more complex. Make references to topics you know about in your raps to diss the opponent. These are the best types of disses because once you understand them you seriously say "OHHHH". That's why in rap battles the crowd hardly ever cheers: they just making noises of recognition because they've understood the reference.

An example of these references would be: "I'll confess to every murder I commited since 3 years old". - Eminem in "If I Get Locked Up Tonight".

He was obviously making a reference to serial killer Ted Bundy who surrounded his aunt in a circle of knives whilst she was sleeping, and when she woke up he was giving her a peculiar smile. He was 3 years old at the time. This wasn't a murder but certainly suggested that something was not right with Bundy. Eminem obviously exaggerated the reference but it was still a clear reference. And once you understand it: MIND BLOWN. (That's not the best example of some of the references he makes though).

Anyway, that's what I'm talking about, you need to make references in your raps to interest the audience instead of coming out with the same old blabber about how you're going to "come first" (LOL). No one gives a shit about that, but if you make references to topics that interest the audience (even if it is coincidentally), you WILL get them on your side. Hope you understand where I'm going with this.

Great Rap Shush

And shady I thought you dont like Eminem now

Thanks dude. And yes she does. Just not as much.

I'm not into his newer stuff at all.

Bonnie wrote:

I'm not into his newer stuff at all.

Not even in airplaines? And I thought shush's rap was definately complex enough though i do agree with you in regards with the rhythem.

Shushes rhymed were really big words that rhymed with each other. He had a couplet, but the flow was broken when the syllables fell apart.

Yeah agree but I was impressed with the vocabulary and the lyrics. I just didn't see much of a flow.

Bonnie wrote:

I'm not into his newer stuff at all.

What about Not Afraid?

Hey guys, I'll enter the next one of these contests. I've got too much going on right now.

Any more entries?

k, i'll write something.

The deadline should be at the end of this month, maybe like the 28th or something because it doesn't seem as though there are going to be many more entries.

It's July 4th.

I know. I'm just proposing an earlier date.

And I was declining the proposal:)

Haha no I respect the that.